Comments on: escape

By: josh

josh — Wed, 26 Sep 2007 03:29:10 +0000

Yeah that would be good. I loved the evocative/poetic abstracted bits totally, but writing the main story just seemed boring. Maybe because it takes so much effort to write the snippets, that it’s tiring just thinking of writing bulk in that style. And maybe because when I write them I’m exploring feeeelings and experience a bit differently to a dispassionate 3rd person omnipotent.

By: h

Tue, 25 Sep 2007 02:34:34 +0000

you see - you seem to change style when you get into story telling or plot. EG the piece for ‘creative writing 101′ has a few snippets of these abstracts, but the course and blood of it is a shifted plot driving style. see if you cannot juxtapose some of these abstracts so that the reader infers a story - like placing still images side by side.

By: h

Tue, 25 Sep 2007 02:32:11 +0000

I am just playing with your movement and stationary ideas in the house. they are nicer than the natural/built idea that you start with.

i thought the above might spark something.

it’s a very loose style of writing, and doesn’t drive a story. like so much of your stuff. it’s easy to read in these small snippets. Mostly you play with witty and interesting abstractions that are interesting to read. I would like to see how a string of these would work in a meta decription. or god forbid a narrative.

By: h

Fri, 21 Sep 2007 05:14:23 +0000

set free to move
unrestrained
in order
hitherto fixed in location
unmovable
but moved.

set free

like you know,
without limits and stuff.